There Are Dummies

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[Yes, the article title is an example of what not to do] 

Starting sentences with “There is/are” or “There was/were” is rarely recommended and usually unnecessary. The same applies to beginning sentences with “It is/was.” Undefined or unintroduced subjects are called dummy subjects.

Beginning a sentence in this way amounts to stating that a thing or things exist(s), then proceeding to say what you want to say about those things. It’s unnecessary to state that something exists because once you describe the thought or action involving this thing, you are already automatically stating that it exists (Yes, that sentence was painful to write…). Doing this twice in a sentence is not only redundant but shifts the focus from the main thought or idea to the establishment of the existence of whatever the subject of the sentence is.

Compare these examples:

Wrong: There was a duplicate keypad on the far wall of the foyer, and I quickly crossed to enter the same code.

Correct: I quickly crossed to the duplicate keypad on the far wall of the foyer and entered the same code.

In the original sentence, the subject appears to be the keypad instead of the character in the story. In the rewritten sentence, the focus is now on the character’s actions. 

Another set of examples:

Wrong: There were faint sounds of tires in the driveway that caused her pulse to race in anticipation.

Correct: The faint sound of tires in the driveway tickled her ears, and her pulse raced in anticipation.

The original sentence is awkward. The rewritten sentence allows the reader to put themselves in the character’s shoes and is much more interesting.

Writers should avoid dummy subjects because they weaken their writing, making it vague and indistinct. In the examples above, “There” replaced the subjects of the sentences. However, that was unnecessary because we know what the subjects are. If you know what the subject is, then the subject shouldn’t be replaced.

Grammar refresher:

  • Subject: performs the action in a sentence – always a noun (person, place, thing) or a pronoun (replaces a noun: he, she, it, they, that, I)
  • Object: receives the action in a sentence
  • Verb: the action performed or received

The only acceptable exceptions would include sentences in which the subject is unknown, or dialogue that involves answering a question or giving directions. For example, if the purpose of the sentence is to state that something or someone is doing something, but you don’t know who or what is actually performing the action, then it would make sense to start with, “There is/are” or “There was/were.”

Reviewing your work and rewording sentences that begin with unnecessary dummy subjects is one of many ways to liven up and strengthen your writing. I find the need to do this with my own writing on a regular basis.

Let me know what you think in the comments!

Hidden

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Project quote:

“We call this phenomenon “demarketing” in marketing management, when the negative effects of a product are so emphasized that people lose sight of the good effects.” (Toni Pinedo-Jeffress, Medicinal Cannabis Saved My Life, 2019)

My thoughts:

While looking for additional examples of products that have been ‘demarketed’, I realized that this type of marketing could be applied to various things besides products as well.

Boundaries, marriage, government, religion, failure…
for example:

Medical Cannabis 
Negative: Affects short-term memory, Impairs cognitive abilities, Damages lungs if smoked, Illegal under federal law
Positive: Effective against seizures and nausea,  Relieves certain chronic pains, Safer than opioids, Available as edibles and topicals (smoking NOT required)

Failure  
Negative: Lost money or time, Embarrassment, ridicule, Incomplete task or goal, Physical harm
Positive: Teaches what doesn’t work, Builds resistance and persistence, Builds muscle memory and skill, Refines goal or required actions

Can you think of any other product or concept that is commonly ‘demarketed’ in society today? Let me know in the comments!


Editing projects from November 19, 2018 – February 3, 2019:
Academic Research Articles, 2 Nonfiction books, Technology website, Research Papers, Nonfiction article, Medical program statement

Client countries:  China, US, Lithuania


 

Little Piece

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As a book editor, it is very rewarding to finally be able to say I’ve edited AND published an eBook co-written by me and my cousin. This book represents a little piece of our history.  I’ll include my eBook description and link below.

Two teenage cousins loved to write poetry in the 1980s before the internet was a thing. Topics near and dear to their hearts – crushes, breakups, friendship, pets, books and nature – are the focus of poems in this collection. Thirty years later, after marriages, divorces and children, Kari and Terrie’s dream of publishing a book is finally realized.

[ Mirrors: Poetry Anthology ]
(available on Amazon)


Contrast

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Project quote: 

“The huge contrast between some people who are older than 65 who are having a blast… and others who…live in fear of…experiencing significant health decline…seems to boil down to two things: Positive mindset [and] Healthy lifestyle habits.” (A.B., G.B., How to Look and Feel Younger After 40 Naturally, 2018)

My thoughts: 

I’ve also observed this difference to be true among those over 65 that I’ve known personally. Foresight is definitely preferred to hindsight when it comes to health. Knowing this now that I’m at the end of my forties forces me to do what I can to improve both my mindset and habits, because I can’t go back in time. I find that many my age who have already experienced major health issues have a difficult time remaining positive and think that there’s nothing they can do to improve their situation.

It’s a struggle to fight this common attitude, but necessary. I try to make a conscious effort to steer conversations away from poor health to something positive, related to positive habits and events. In my opinion, life is about how we deal with our problems, not about accepting whatever happens as inevitable.

So I continue to reestablish good habits and remind myself of goals and things I’m grateful for. As they say, today’s another new day. 😊


Editing projects from August 20 – November 18, 2018:
Product data spreadsheet, Fiction book, Nonfiction book, several Academic research articles, Nonfiction book, Medical program essays, Health blog post, Fitness website video transcript
Client countries:  US, China, New Zealand, Israel